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14 years ago @ nikki - Reality versus Education · 0 replies · +1 points
Good job!!
14 years ago @ nikki - Reality versus Education · 0 replies · +1 points
I think you used quotes effectively throughout the paper, especially when talking about the values society says it has. I was actually sorry to hear that you were disappointed when entering the classroom but then relieved as I continued to read and learned you "...broke free of the chains that bound you to that false reality." That paragraph was compelling to me. I had a strong appeal and I felt drawn in. It was simply stated and powerful at the same time.
Overall, I think you did a fantastic job. Your paper brought out a lot of feelings from me. I was upset when you got an F, disappointed wehn you walked into the classroom, and liberated when you developed a different view about the purpose of education.
14 years ago @ nikki - Reality versus Education · 0 replies · +1 points
Your example from high school shows how standing out in the educational system can be mistaken for rebellion and is punished instead of encouraged. It's sad that students have to sometimes inhibit themselves to advance and suffer consequences that can be detrimental (especially in your case) when they decide to release their inhibitions. At the end of that paragraph you said you remembered the reason you decided to express your opposing opinions in your final paper. I'd like to know what that reason was. Was it because you were tired of mimicing your teachers' opinions or because you felt expressing your true opinion was an opportunity to learn more effectively? Perhaps it was both or something else.
14 years ago @ nikki - Assignment #4: Reality... · 0 replies · +1 points
14 years ago @ nikki - Feminist Poetry: Admir... · 0 replies · +1 points
Towards the end of your paper, you describe Rich’s story to be pointless and that angry tone becomes a bit offensive. For example, say you don’t like the way you’re being treated by someone and you decide to talk to them about it and the issue is resolved. For you, this may be a major accomplishment and it would be rude for me to tell you your feelings were not real and they are still treating you the same. I’m not saying you should change your approach or style of writing because I like it and it’s unique. Perhaps you should soften it a bit.
I think you did a good job on your paper and it brought out a lot of emotion from me as I read it (I appreciate that). You did a great job connecting your introduction to the conclusion and I enjoyed reading it. Also, I think we have to cite properly when using quotes. Well done!!!
14 years ago @ nikki - Feminist Poetry: Admir... · 0 replies · +1 points
As I read your paper, I see that you understand the reading and you interpret it well. At the end of the second paragraph you quote, “…that female fatigue of suppressed anger and loss of contact from my own being; partly from the discontinuity of female life with its attention to small chores, errands, work that others constantly undo, small children’s constant needs”. I would like to know what you think this quote is saying; what’s your interpretation?
14 years ago @ Daily Blog - Smile For The Camera? · 0 replies · +1 points
14 years ago @ Daily Blog - Smile For The Camera? · 0 replies · +1 points
14 years ago @ kabrathw - Can A Camera Be Misused? · 0 replies · +1 points
14 years ago @ kabrathw - Can A Camera Be Misused? · 0 replies · +1 points