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14 years ago @ zimmer3 - Through the Looking Lens · 0 replies · +1 points
14 years ago @ megs - Who Belongs Where · 0 replies · +1 points
I enjoyed your essay. It was well written and had a good flow to it. I like the way you considered Said's essay under the scope of Hirsch's Projected Memory. I was a little confused about your statement of Lorie Novak. I don't think she risked her life to save those children. I think she placed herself in the picture of those children to show that they will always be entwined in who she is. Their past and their memories will shape her future and be a part of her memories. I don't think she was alive at the time that they went through what they did. Overall very good job and thanks, for commenting on my essay.
14 years ago @ rabbot - Identity · 0 replies · +1 points
I thought your essay was excellent. I like the sources you quote. It has great flow and is very informative. Your essay gave me a new perspective on Said's essay and was very well done. The only two nit-picky things I can come up with that would make your essay better are: I was confused by this quote “I have been told. I grew up in Egypt, then came to the United States as a student” (Said p 385). This quote is actually a part of two sentences. "I have been told" refers to who had lived in his house after they had left. I don't see how that helps your argument that Said remembers little of his time in Palestine and the second really nit-picky thing is you use the phrase "bring fourth" twice in your third paragraph. I think that should be "bring forth". I told you they were nit-picky!!!!
Very Good Job, Stuart.
14 years ago @ Hello World! - The Child Witness and ... · 0 replies · +1 points
14 years ago @ Hello World! - Photographs and Memories · 0 replies · +1 points
For some reason when I got to the part of the directions that said "feel free to draw from your earlier writings" My mind went blank and I forgot what the assignment actually was. Although I had read the directions, that last statement, in my mind meant optional which I realize (now) was wrong.
14 years ago @ rabbot - The marriage of words ... · 0 replies · +1 points
14 years ago @ zimmer3 - Pictures, Text, and th... · 0 replies · +1 points
I like your essay. It has given me another way to look at the essay. When I read the essay I was trying to figure out what they were trying to do , not what their piece was doing to the reader. It seemed to me that Agee actually got a bit sidetracked by Emma. It was almost as if he was telling you about this family as an observer only, but as he describes Emma he actually places himself in the story. He never mentions his conversations with the other people, you know he must have had them, but somehow his unusual writing style was abandoned with Emma. She must have made a big impression on him. When I reread Let Us Now Praise Famous Men I will definately keep your perpective in mind. Good Job.
14 years ago @ rabbot - The marriage of words ... · 2 replies · +1 points
I think you did a great job on this essay. It definately has more of a personal feel than your previous one. I feel that you explained the text and your feelings very well. I thought that you had a great flow to your essay, each point led directly to the next. You had a good conclusion and I think you supported it well. I can not think of a way to make your essay any better than it is right now. I find reviewing others essays harder than doing my own. If I knew what would make your essay better, or what would make you a better writer, I would have much more confidence in my own. I think you did a great job, whatever that means. :)